Wednesday, October 29, 2008
Jose thought for a little until he said "positive 30.....WAIT I mean negative 30"."You are right" said his father. As usual he starts falling into a vortex.......

To Be Continued.....
......RIGHT NOW

So Jose is zooming through the vortex thinking of what just happened and how much fun hes having. Then suddenly another thud "AW MAN that's really going to hurt in the morning" says Jose. Then he hears a loud BOOM, he finally realizes that hes in bomberman and he is the blue man. So he starts running around in his suit that somehow holds an infinite amount of bombs. anyway 10 minutes later he eliminates the yellow man. the red man gets eliminated by the green man. After a while Jose finds the green man. The green man says " i'l make you a deal if you answer one integer question I will eliminate myself. The question was.....
Jose took 5 minutes to think. Hmmmmm.....OH i know now the answer is +11. He was right and the red man kept his word and eliminated himself and made a large vortex and of coarse Jose fell in. Jose finally lands in the game snake but now he was the snake eating those squares that are supposed to be food and avoiding biting his tail. He was getting really long so it was the last mouse he had to eat and then the mouse or square started to talk. "Hey if you answer this one science question you will win" said the talking box. "Yes finally a question that is not math"said Jose. But out of no where the box said "oops that's right its a MATH question, sorry I'm a box I'm not very smart". "Okay okay just ask me the question" said Jose. The question was....

Jose thought long and hard when he came up with the answer -13. He was right but instead of falling into a vortex a stage comes up. Everyone from the video games were there. And Jose got an award for completing all those games. He started his speech "First I would like to thank my mom, dad, and the maker of these video games" he started to tear. Out of nowhere he hears a loud noise. Its his math teacher Mr.Harold yelling at him. He couldn't believe it it was all a dream but, he could believe that Mr. Harold gave him detention for sleeping in class.

The End

(Sorry for the non- artistic pictures at the bottom. Unlike the top 4 pictures.)

1. Clarence 9-06 said...

Good job adrian you did a good job on the picture and the story !

October 29, 2008 at 9:43 PM

2. Joseph 8-41 said...

nice pictures. You might want to watch your sentences, because some of them are too long, add comas=P

October 30, 2008 at 9:51 PM

3. Anonymous said...

Pssh, Clarence... You just had to say what I was going to say! LOL! Adrian, I like your pictures, they really stand out to me(;
--Carrie Tanafranca.

November 2, 2008 at 2:07 PM

4. kuung 841 said...

Where's Yoshi and Toad, panda! :) HAHA, well good job. Your pictures are very ... artistic.

Jose boredly said "the answer to that question is positive 28".
'Boredly' isn't a word. I had to go to dictionary.com and check if it was or not! :) After said, put a comma and capitalize the T in the after the quotation marks.
Whenever a character is talking, after the quoation marks comes a capital. Most of them aren't capitalized, panda ;p

Jose said " what, what do I have to do".
Shouldn't there be a question mark after do?
Also, the period should be after do, not outside of the quotation marks. < You have a lot of mistakes with that.

Out of no where he sees him self in the game "whoa this is the coolest thing I've ever done.
Remember to capitalize first letter of the word when someone's talking. Also, is Jose done talking? Because I see no quotation marks at the end of done :)
AND- you wrote 'no where' < it's spelled together like 'nowhere'.

^ HAHAHA! I tried going all Nicky and Arielle-ish :) This is the longest comment i've ever done -_-. Well good job panda!

November 4, 2008 at 9:04 PM